tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12790525.post116040983168011008..comments2007-03-04T21:32:31.369-05:00Mattnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12790525.post-1161372610941094922006-10-20T15:30:00.000-04:002006-10-20T15:30:00.000-04:00You need to remember that when you're reading a piece of your work, most people that are going to be listening to you are women! I don't appreciate the vulgar language you used in your writing "Adina Astroweed Chipawese Jasmin" talking about Julias "pussy" and shoving pills up it, etc. It wasn't really necessary! I think your story would have been interesting had it not been for that and a few other pointless, force added terms you used in reference to Kevins feelings on his marriage. He didn't fell out of love with her. Great! He wanted to cheat on her every chance he got. Fine! But what purpose do things like "shoving it up her pussy" serve? How does it enhance your story? You're choice of wording to me seems intentionally derogatory!Alana Welchnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12790525.post-1160445674959630622006-10-09T22:01:00.000-04:002006-10-09T22:01:00.000-04:00I believe they call it a "yarmulke."Kristinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06930775322640765564noreply@blogger.com